Name: Anuket (Signed) · Datum: 2008.12.22 18:36 · Für: Chapter 1
Writing what you know makes a lot of sense. I have a degree in science (focusing on paleontology) and work for a museum...so you can see that I might be able to relate to Daniel maybe more so than a lot of people =) The only military knowledge I have actually comes just from watching/reading Stargate. Honestly I feel over the many many years I've been a fan I have learned A LOT about military regulations and procedures. And my parents used to tell me I couldn't learn anything from watching television.... ha! I will definitely be sure to read your other stories as well (the ones I have yet to read that is).
Author's Response: I can easily see that. Thanks again for reading and reviewing.
Name: Anuket (Signed) · Datum: 2008.12.20 18:56 · Für: Chapter 1
You had a very good and very well thought out story. Sometimes it's really obvious when a writer has no idea what they're writing about, which is clearly not the case with you! Well thought out writing is very much appreciated (by me at least). I am a huge Daniel fan and I can tell that you are not so much--but I am also a big Sam/Jack fan which made up for it in your story =)
The only thing I would wish for would be more personal moments between the couples...not helio2 types moments...but I was really wanting to know how they interact with eachother on a daily basis. I can only imagine how difficult it already was taking us through the span of several years....but maybe something like experiencing the weddings or one the births with them instead of having it listed as just happening--things like that. I'm an incredibly selfish reader as you can see--you have this wonderful story and here I am asking more of you! For that I apologize. And for making this such a long review...that must be annoying. I think the problem lies with me wanting every good story to be of novel length or more because I just can't get enough! Thank you for your story!
Author's Response: Thank you for your excellent review. I don't dislike Daniel. I just don't know how to write him. I'm military and I can easily relate to them and thus they are easy to write. Teal'c...he is totally alien and that both makes it easier and harder to write him. As for additional scenes, I have actually tried. But every time I revisit the story and writing more, I can't find a scene that doesn't break up the flow of the story. I'm glad that you want more. I just don't have any for this story. Although, if you want a recommendation, try starting with another of my stories...To Sleep Perchance to Dream. It follows Jack's clone and the series ends with 'Second to None' when Jon goes to Basic. I do plan on continuing the story...eventually. Thanks again.
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