Name: Schatze8210 (Signed) · Datum: 2012.01.25 21:57 · Für: Epilogue
I just discovered your story and spent the last several hours reading it. I found it to be wonderfully creative, intelligent, and engrossing. Thank you for sharing it!
Author's Response: Thanks...I'm glad you liked it!
Name: jo (Anonymous) · Datum: 2008.06.08 15:56 · Für: Inside the Dragon's Egg
Thank you. Your story is wonderful.
Author's Response: Thanks, I'm very glad you liked it : )
Name: mj (Anonymous) · Datum: 2008.04.05 12:27 · Für: Inside the Dragon's Egg
*****
Name: hollinkentf (Anonymous) · Datum: 2008.03.10 13:00 · Für: Epilogue
Wow!! What a great story!! I hope you will write more S/J stories. I thought the chapter through Allys eyes eyes was incredibly descriptive and well written. Actually the whole story was wonderful!! Hope you write more soon
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm still recuperating from this one, lol, but you never know. I do have several other stories posted here though none along this line. Most have a S/J element to one degree or another. Thanks for reading and reviewing!
Name: Tee (Anonymous) · Datum: 2008.03.07 18:26 · Für: Inside the Dragon's Egg
Awesome, awesome, awesome!!! I have to admit I was a little afraid to carry on after the 2nd chapter, and then especially after the 3rd. I am so happy I did tho. This has got to be one of the best stories I have read in a very long time.
Thank you!
Author's Response: Thanks. I was a bit leery myself, lol! I was very happy to see it draw to a conclusion I could live with as for awhile there...! I'm glad you enjoyed it and thanks for the feedback!
Name: StarnightSam (Signed) · Datum: 2008.03.05 22:34 · Für: Epilogue
As you already know. I loved it. Great characterizations, the hold story had me either crying, or biting my nails at all times.
I couldn't wait for the next chapter, each time. You kept me checking this site!
The elogue just fleshed out more of the facts, and added just the right touch. Really good ending to a fantastic story! Thanks.
And, no I don't care if you get enough sleep or not! or if your house is clean! LOL.
GREAT STORY! What's next?
Name: Tribal Matriarch (Signed) · Datum: 2008.03.05 12:34 · Für: One Day
Doh! I wish this had carried on, but I know myself there's a point in which story becomes waffle if you allow it to!
Great premise and well written... my only gripe/peeve was the use of drug instead of dragged that you continually used.
I can live with it though, if I copy stories like yours I change the words for the correct ones anyway!
Well done once more!
Author's Response: Whoops…sorry about that. Your way looks and sounds so alien to me that I’m afraid this is a case of your sins finding you out…I might as well confess that when this lesson came around in school I apparently was either mentally out boldly going with Kirk, Spock, and McCoy or reading The Count of Monte Cristo under my desk : ( I’m glad you enjoyed the story anyway.
Name: Rocza (Signed) · Datum: 2008.03.04 14:15 · Für: Two Roads
Don't worry about your descriptons of the sound. Most people just imagine a Hollywood picture. Your descriptions were more than enough to ensure our imaginations covered the distance. Machine gun fire can be heard amost a mile away and is very distinct. If you wanted to see pictures of damage. Google War Pictures or Images. The Bosnia conflict is a good place since most of the fighting took place in small cities and villages that look alot like the USA. They are more disturbing simply because you can easily identify the objects that are destroyed or left behind as refust. The image that sticks with me is a bullet riddled brick wall behind a girls bicycle. No blood, just devistation that shouldn't be. CNN and FoxNew are also good websites for images and information.
I did want to add that you don't have to over describe a scene. Have someone in law enforcement or martial arts read your fight scenes and they can tell if you have too much or not enought imagry. Personally, I think you hit it spot on. Good job!
Author's Response: Thanks for the advice...not sure I actually want to see the pics. I remember some similar shots from the Olympic spots way back when : ( I wouldn't have thought of looking for something like that though. And thanks also for the encouragement. I haven't written many action scenes so it was a bit of a stretch for me.
Name: StarnightSam (Signed) · Datum: 2008.03.03 12:13 · Für: Two Roads
I held my breath and ground my teeth all the way through this. I read it non stop after starting it. (Hide in the bathroom! LOL) It is not only well written and you didn't leave out a thing, it is nerve wracking!
I felt as if I was running with Jack as he made his way to the river, I could feel his heart beating 90 miles an hour, and his pain at having given in to Sam's demand that he leave her behind. I felt his worry as he moved over the river and his heart in pieces not knowing what was to come, or what had happened to the rest of his family.
I could feel every ounce of Daniel's uncertainty and fear. I absolutely loved that part! Such an unexpected scene with him and Janet (just added more to your story) and the way the room and everything was set up. Boy did you surprise us!
Then Sam! Oh, my heart is breaking and tears are streaming! It was so sad… But I can’t wait for the next part.
Name: StarnightSam (Signed) · Datum: 2008.02.27 13:49 · Für: Peering Through the Glass Darkly or Her Mother's Daughter
I just have to say it where all can see it. This is the best story I've read in a long long time, maybe since I read the Standing series. Maybe even better than those!
I love this little girl and the way she makes me feel. She brings both tears and pain each time i read one of your chapters.
I absolutely love your portrayal of both Sam and Jack. I can't begin to image what they are going through. I loved this chapter as we have already talked about...
Although my hearts is skipping beats just thinking what you have planned for the next chapters... No wonder you can't sleep!! LOL. It's your punishment! LOL.
oh!! It's interesting that you used both titles! Cool!
Thanks for sharing it!
Author's Response: Thanks...as always.
Name: Rocza (Signed) · Datum: 2008.02.26 12:07 · Für: Peering Through the Glass Darkly or Her Mother's Daughter
Excellent continuation. I can't wait to read more. I like how you are allowing Ally to give into childish hatred and fear. No one loves or hates as purely as a child and you have captured that brilliantly. Great job.
Author's Response: Thanks very much : )
Name: Tribal Matriarch (Signed) · Datum: 2008.02.20 17:55 · Für: Ancient Thoughts
Very Interesting!
I actually cried in a couple of places. Hope you update it soon and we see what will happen.
Author's Response: Thank you...I do have more to post as soon as my beta runs her critical eye over them. And I'm working on what I sincerely hope is the final story--my health, house, and children are all suffering because this story is rather consuming! LOLrnrnI do have to say, I laughed when I saw your review as the other night while not quite able to take the plunge and write a particularly harrying scene, I read your "Left Holding the Baby". I didn't get around to writing a review but I meant too...I enjoyed it a lot-a very enjoyable story : )
Name: StarnightSam (Signed) · Datum: 2008.02.20 00:20 · Für: Inside the Dragon's Egg
I know you already know that I love this story, but I wanted it stated here!
As always, you stretch our imagination to the limit! What an original idea!
Love it!
Name: StarnightSam (Signed) · Datum: 2008.02.20 00:17 · Für: Ancient Thoughts
This is absolutely wonderful. It not only meets your excellence in inagination, but exceeds it. It is amazing how you have taken us into the mind of Ally and filled us with the same dread and fear that she feels.
Great story! Great writing.
Author's Response: Thanks...for the kind reviews and more importantly for letting me bounce my ideas back and forth with you. I'm quite sure you'll recognize some of your insights into character motivations popping up in these next few chapters : )
Name: Tee (Anonymous) · Datum: 2008.02.07 21:50 · Für: Ancient Thoughts
Wow - what a great story. My heart was just breaking for Ally. To be so little and know so much. I hope that she can come to some sort of resolution as she ages, and lead a somewhat happy life, as much as that is possible.
Author's Response: Oh, me, too!!! I'm trying, but this story really does have a mind of its own...
Name: Anne Trembley (Anonymous) · Datum: 2008.02.04 21:50 · Für: Ancient Thoughts
GREAT story, fits into canon in a way so few stories do that take such a big step. I enjoyed it a LOT,truly surprisd you never hit on the Autism Diagnosis, since so much of her behavior easily fits into the spectrum and makes an EASY cover story. It's a diagnosis that could be used for many years as cover.
Author's Response: I'm really glad to hear you like the story. So far I've tried to avoid giving an official diagnosis for two reasons (well, three if you count the fact I'm too lazy to do the research to see how true mutism would change or feed into autism!). First, the diagnosis really can't define Ally...what she appears to be to the outside world has nothing to do with the reality of what she is or will be. Second, to me, officially labeling her autistic means she should be getting intensive intervention which I have no experience to write about, would be pure torture for Ally, and would open her up to outside scrutiny that she cannot afford. And I don't know how to write it because I still don't have a clear picture in my own mind of what Sam is thinking...does she have complete faith that Ally is just what she should be and is going to grow into a functioning individual? Is she deep down afraid that Ally's life will never improve, that the miracle she's hoping and waiting for is just a pipe dream? She can't read Ally's mind or the future. Does she believe in what she's doing with enough faith to resist the pressure (from drs, therapists, Janet, etc. and from her own parental guilt and accountability) to not seek her daughter any and all possible help? As a mom could she really deny Ally the possibility that behavioral therapy might make her life more bearable now, could/would she be willing to leave Ally in solitary torment when there might be ways to reach her??? Sigh...at this point, I just don't know so am avoiding the issue as much as possible, lol.
Name: Diana Torres (Anonymous) · Datum: 2008.02.04 10:41 · Für: Ancient Thoughts
What a beautiful story! My heart ached for all the characters- Pete, for not getting the love from a child he so desperately tried to win over.. Ally, for the pain of being in a world she didn't understand... Sam, for the pain of being a mother who couldn't fully comfort or understand her child... The grandparents.... Great story!
Author's Response: Thanks very much for your feedback. It helps a lot to know what people relate to!
Name: dipsofjazz (Anonymous) · Datum: 2008.02.01 15:56 · Für: Ancient Thoughts
I loved both of these stories. Please write more and tell us what happens next.....I need to know!
Author's Response: LOL...I'd really like to know, too! I'm working on it, but so far it's fairly slow going. rnrnThanks for letting me know you enjoyed them: )
Name: Anonymous (Signed) · Datum: 2007.12.25 22:11 · Für: Inside the Dragon's Egg
Great story. Please give us more.
Author's Response: Thanks...I'm glad you liked it. I am working on a followup that hopefully be worth posting sooner or later : )
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