Okay, well undoubtedly I'll have more to say after Chapter 5, but W0W, you do have a knack for building up suspense. And this thing that Jack knows that nobody else knows is really tantalizing. On to Chapter 6. You also seem to have a flair for descriptions, as in Jack' nightmares with all the bodies around him. Good job.
like the story so far, please continue!
OOOH, i love ur story its fascinating, no-one else has done anything like this, its so creative, i want more!!! i paticularly enjoy the build up in each of your chapters!
thanxz