Name: jeanieofoz (Anonymous) · Datum: 2007.11.18 02:17 · Für: Chapter 36 - Upgrades and Emotions
so glad there was an update :)

Name: martin (Anonymous) · Datum: 2007.11.15 07:44 · Für: Chapter 33 - Waiting for a Delivery

Great story  but you have got to finish it.

I don't know how much longer I can wait.

Name: night (Anonymous) · Datum: 2007.09.18 22:07 · Für: Chapter 33 - Waiting for a Delivery
stunningly wonderful!

Name: ebba (Anonymous) · Datum: 2007.09.18 07:29 · Für: Chapter 33 - Waiting for a Delivery
wow your story was amazing it was so good i loved the fact that u did it like between and during the real shows it made it so really like it was accually going on at the same time. and your story was really origional to ive never read one where she gets raped before.

Name: Veratyr (Signed) · Datum: 2007.08.27 16:41 · Für: Chapter 33 - Waiting for a Delivery
Perfect! I'll read on!

Name: Veratyr (Signed) · Datum: 2007.08.27 16:32 · Für: Chapter 31 - Making Plans...House Plans
I love the ending of this chapter! LOL, you have put a smile on my face with your plot line and character interaction! I'll read on.

Name: Veratyr (Signed) · Datum: 2007.08.27 16:26 · Für: Chapter 30 - Death, the Small Victory?
The Tiger's roar cannot be held, Jacks emotions are welling and it is very obvious. Good job! I'll read on.

Name: Veratyr (Signed) · Datum: 2007.08.27 16:13 · Für: Chapter 29 - Not Going Fishing...Again
You have established the routien very well, lets see how the plot carries itself out.

Name: Veratyr (Signed) · Datum: 2007.08.27 16:09 · Für: Chapter 28 - What's going on here?
Yes, we are building up to a very large onflict....I cannot wait! I'll read on

Name: Veratyr (Signed) · Datum: 2007.08.27 16:04 · Für: Chapter 27 - It's About Time!!!
Again, your interaction between characters is perfect and profound....I'll keep reading

Name: Veratyr (Signed) · Datum: 2007.08.27 16:00 · Für: Chapter 26 - The Wake Up Call
The ending caught my heart! OMG......I'm almost crying, that means you have done a great job....I'll read on!

Name: Veratyr (Signed) · Datum: 2007.08.27 15:55 · Für: Chapter 25 - Wake Up, Little Sammie
The interaction between Sam and Jack is perfect! I'll read on.

Name: Veratyr (Signed) · Datum: 2007.08.27 15:46 · Für: Chapter 24 - Tell Me It Ain't So
Again, very well done! Jacks emotions are very powerful and you have demonstrated that very well, once the tiger is out of his cage, it is hard to ask him back in. I'll read on.

Name: KATE (Anonymous) · Datum: 2007.08.26 06:59 · Für: Chapter 33 - Waiting for a Delivery



Name: Merkaba (Signed) · Datum: 2007.08.24 19:13 · Für: Chapter 31 - Making Plans...House Plans
I'm really enjoying the whole story.  I can hardly wait to see if and how Jack's words about thing blowing up in their face come back to haunt them.  More please!!!!!!

Name: Merkaba (Signed) · Datum: 2007.08.24 18:42 · Für: Chapter 27 - It's About Time!!!
Very good chapter! I loved how you melded your story with the actual episode.  The double meaning in the discussion at the bottom of the ramp was great.  The writing is, as always, amazingly wonderful. You keep the characters really believeable.  I am really enjoying this.  Thank you for all of the new chapters to read! 

Name: Veratyr (Signed) · Datum: 2007.08.23 18:54 · Für: Chapter 23 - Jack's Shower
Again, what can I say. very well done! I'll read on! 

Name: Veratyr (Signed) · Datum: 2007.08.23 18:41 · Für: Chapter 22 - Teal'c's Confession
I love the Sam/Teal'c interaction, however I am not quite convinced that Teal'c would end the conversation that way, yet we have also never seen Teal'c in that kind of situation before.     You have painted a beautiful picture in my mind of the situation, yet have not convinced me of Teal'c character...I believe that he is the hardest to write about! So don't sweat it! Your writing is beautiful! I shall read on!  

Name: Veratyr (Signed) · Datum: 2007.08.23 18:17 · Für: Chapter 21 - The Waterfall - Day
All I can say; very well done!

Name: Veratyr (Signed) · Datum: 2007.08.23 18:08 · Für: Chapter 20 - Not Right Now!
 Also very well done! The control that Jack uses is very rare and only proves his genuine character, i'll read on!

Name: Veratyr (Signed) · Datum: 2007.08.23 08:29 · Für: Chapter 19 - At the Waterfall - Night
Sorry it has taken me so long to logon and to finish reading your wonderful story. This chapter is very well writen, the character interaction is true to each individual and also the plot line. It happens so many times that fan writers develop the plot, yet do not keep the integrity of the characters.    You have done very well! I will read on!  

Name: KrisK (Signed) · Datum: 2007.08.08 08:40 · Für: Chapter 29 - Not Going Fishing...Again

This is a great story, Grizziesmom.  I especially like your use of canon in this chapter.  And everyday it's the same thing, did it get updated today! 

Thanks for all your hard work, can't wait for more!


Name: jaden valari (Anonymous) · Datum: 2007.08.04 21:17 · Für: Chapter 22 - Teal'c's Confession

Yay! Can't wait for the next installment!

Great work!

Name: KeturahDedan (Signed) · Datum: 2007.07.27 20:31 · Für: Chapter 1 - Discovery Is Deadly
Wow, I totally got hooked on the first paragraph. Mainly because it immediately catches your attention with the hint that something horrible may have happened. But at the same times it relieves some of the anxiety the reader experiences when worrying about Sam. That little comment about jack's gem sort of refers to one of Jack's many idiosyncrasies, one being his tendency to remark sarcastically to difficult and stressful situations. (I apologize if my review is a little off. I'm completely and utterly exhausted. Also, I can barely even think about what I'm typing. Again I apologize)

Name: merkaba (Signed) · Datum: 2007.07.23 22:09 · Für: Chapter 21 - The Waterfall - Day

This is really good.  I'm hooked.  I can't believe it is 1am and I haven't finished feeding dogs and horses!  I only intended to read one chapter and read the whole thing.  Please post more.  Can't you hear Jack and Sam saying... "Finish us... Finish our story..."

Seriously, you have created a great story that is very much character driven.  You move the story along at just the right pace so that their actions seem very true to what they might have done.  More please.  I am channeling my inner Jack "Write more now... Thats an order"  :-)



Author's Response: Here's hoping you got your chores done and some sleep too!  Thanks for the psoitive feedback...as following orders, I'm doing some cleaniing up on the next couple chapters....might be a couple days, sorry....But I'll do my best to fill the space ASAP.

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