man i really really like your story.
its like ebveryday when i get home i immidatly go on and check if youve updated it ;)
i like the fluff too, its nice.
continue writting !!
This is great, I loved it the first time around, was dissapointed that it never got finished. I feel you have got the characters right, Jack can be obtuse sometimes! Keep writing, it's good, very good.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I really appreciate that, and I promise to finish it this time around.
I am really enjoying this, a bit of angst coming up I should imagine from Sam, but Jack is sounding very decisive so there is hope. A lot can happen on the long journey back!!
Author's Response: You're so right!!! And I'm really glad you're enjoying it. I hope I can live up to your expectations.
Sorry, I meant to pass along some sympathy for taking care of your father-in-law. I hope he is doing well.
Author's Response: Wow, Bucky. Thank you so much. I really appreciate that. Sometimes it's hard to remember as we're sitting waiting ever so impatiently for the next bit of a story that the authors really have lives outside of writing. At least, that was the case for me. When I was writing this story last time my husband and I separated, there was my son's hamster's suicide attempt, which later (after much in the way of vet's bills) actually did in his death. Since then my husband and I are back together, which is a good thing. In March of this last month I lost two grandparents, my job, my mom had a breast cancer scare, my step-father is still in the midst of his cancer scare, and then my father-in-law needing heart surgery. He's doing great now, by the way. Anyway, this story has been a bit of a refuge for me. I hope you keep enjoying it.
I love angst! Let's have more!
Author's Response: Weeeelllll, okay. Just cause you asked me nicely and have reviewed so faithfully. :) You got it. Next chapter is nothing but fluff but there is A LOT more angst on the way.
What a great chapter! I love it,the angst is tear jerking, can't remember all of the original but really looking forward to the rest, sometimes things can be improved on with re-writing.
Author's Response: Wow, thank you. It means a lot to me that you're enjoying the re-write. I hope it continues to live up to it's potential.
ahw wow, completly amazing,
i love how you caputred the perfect jack oneill,
and the hollar back girk thing XD fantastic. good story line too, cant wait to read the rest of it.
continue as fast as possible :D
Author's Response:Well thank you so much! You just have no idea how much that means to me.
I'm glad you got a kick out of the Hollaback Girl. I just figured that there was no way in hell Jack would get that.
Thank you so much for writing. It really does keep me encouraged and motivated to keep posting.
Thanks for the update! You made my evening ...
Author's Response: I'm so glad! It's so nice to know that people are enjoying what started out as fun but has turned into a task almost. It's still fun, but it's something I have to do now. I hope you keep enjoying it.
Just noticed your author's note for this chapter. "Leaving on a Jet Plane" was written and first sung by John Denver. It was made famous by the folk trio "Peter, Paul, and Mary." Here's the url to the Wikipedia article:
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Leaving_on_a_Jet_Plane
Author's Response: Thank you! I had head that it was John Denver before, I knew I liked Chantel's version better than that one. I had completely forgotten about Peter, Paul, and Mary!! That's the version I grew up with. Thanks so much for the link!
I just started reading this and find myself caught up in it. I have to tell you that I *really* don't like songfics, but you've worked around that set of cliches in an interesting way.
I could see Jack choking up when he heard that Sam was okay--that was a nice touch.
I hope to see more chapters from you soon.
Author's Response:Thank you, that really means a lot to me. I'm so glad you liked it. I'm really glad that you didn't quit when you realized it was a sort of somewhat songfic. I'm really glad you liked the way I did it. It just seemed to fit for me.
And as for Jack choking up when he talked to Sam. That's all him. He told me to put it in there that way. Most of the time, I do what I want with these characters, but sometimes they make me do it their way.
Enjoy the rest!
Thank you for your reply! I'm glad there won't be any actual rape, attempted one I can live/read with, cause it doesn't happen.Looking forward to the update!
Author's Response:No problem. I'm happy to reply. Sometimes I really suck at getting things done in a timely manner, and this last week has been absolutely crazy, but yeah, I'm not real fond of rape (weird understatement of the year) but the truth of the matter is that 1 out of every 5 women in the United States is raped. Those are staggering numbers. Below is some information on what is considered sexual assualt. This is why I included it in my warnings -- even something as simple as kissing someone while they are passed out drunk is considered sexual assault. Anyway, feel free to read on in the story, it's not going to go to a dark place. It's going to stay fairly light and fluffy.
Sexual assault can be defined as any type of sexual contact or behavior that occurs without the explicit consent of the recipient of the unwanted sexual activity. Falling under the definition of sexual assault is sexual activity such as forced sexual intercourse, sodomy, child molestation, incest, fondling, and attempted rape. Some more specific examples of sexual assault include:
- Unwanted vaginal, anal, or oral penetration with any object
- Forcing an individual to perform or receive oral sex
- Forcing an individual to masturbate, or to masturbate someone else
- Forcing an individual to look at sexually explicit material or forcing an individual to pose for sexually explicit pictures
- Touching, fondling, kissing, and any other unwanted sexual contact with an individual's body
- Exposure and/or flashing of sexual body parts
In general, state law assumes that a person does not consent to sexual activity if he or she is forced, threatened, unconscious, drugged, a minor, developmentally disabled, chronically mentally ill, or believe they are undergoing a medical procedure.
Perpetrators of sexual assault can be strangers, friends, acquaintances, or family members. Often, perpetrators commit sexual assault by way of violence, threats, coercion, manipulation, pressure, or tricks. In extreme cases, sexual assault may involve the use of force which may include, but is not limited to:
- Physical violence
- Use or display of a weapon
- Immobilization of victim
More often, however, sexual assault involves psychological coercion and taking advantage of an individual who is incapacitated or under duress and, therefore, is incapable of making a decision on his or her own.
Source: Rape, Abuse, and Incest National Network (RAINN)
When I read the first chapter I thought I have read this somewhere before and then when I read chapters 2 and 3 I knew I had read it somewhere before, but It's driving me crazy trying to figure out where. Where have this been posted before?
Author's Response: I posted it here in 2005, but wasn't happy with it and there were a LOT of changes going on in my life. I just never picked it back up. I'm ready to finish it now. I had it posted here, but when the big changes were made to Helio, I lost part of the story, which is okay because that was part of what I wanted to rewrite anyway. So, I deleted everything I had posted before and reposting with the changes I want.
Oh BOY! It's a good thing you deleted the earlier version - otherwise I'd be searching for it and .... WOW. Thanks and post more soon.
Author's Response: Oh, Abby, you just have no idea what that means to me. I'm really glad you liked it. And yeah, I was afraid that people would get confused between the two versions or that I'd get confused and update the wrong one, etc. I'm loving Groceries, so you keep writing that and I'll keep writing this and at worst, we'll keep each other entertained!
Just read chap. 3, excellent but please continue with it, there is so much more to be said, if I remember rightly the other version was in 3 or 4 parts so lots more scope.
Author's Response: Thanks! Yep, I'm going to keep going with this one to the very end. Feedback does help encourage me to keep going. ;)
I read and enjoyed the original version, so am really looking forward to the revised one. Can already tell that it is going to be good, please update regularly as folks lose interest if the gap is too long.
Author's Response: Thank you! I really hope this lives up to that original. I just wasn't happy with it, which is probably why I never finished it. This one just seems to be easier. I hope you enjoy. And I'll try to keep updating as fast as possible, giving myself a maximum one week before next post deadline. I'm hoping it won't take that long though.
as far as I remember the original never included rape. Please delete that part.
Author's Response: I'm not actually planning on including a rape. I am planning on including an attempted forceful kiss/trying to get something started, one that's stopped early. Much later on in the story. I just thought I should include the warning, just in case.