Hee Hee Hee. The reaction of Jack listening to the words of Kellis is priceless. Sorry you lost interest in this story. You're a great writer.
When a seemingly normal mission goes badly wrong things don't look good for Jack and Sam.
Wonderful story, but hard to read because of the spacing. I would like to see a sequel, just to find out Jacob's reaction. Hope he scares Jack a bit.
Author's Response:
Thanks for your comment it is most appreciated. What was it about the spacing you think i should change to make it easier to read.
Any and all ideas are gratfully received, many thanx. I'd love to do a sequel.