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Date: 2008.03.18 Title: Chapter 1: Going Up?
Interesting plot development, as well as character development. All in all I think it is a good story! Very well done!
Heightened Sensation by Gail Delaney
Rated: AO • 5 Reviews
Summary: **"He also seems to be able to enhance our enjoyment of certain experiences in order to motivate us.” ~ Daniel, URGO**
Date: 2007.09.22 Title: Chapter 1: Heightened Sensation
Very well done! There are so many good writers on this cite! Pelase keep up the fantastic stories!
Date: 2007.09.22 Title: Chapter 1: Sujestions
love the ending! Urgo was so very troublesome! Please keep writing!
You Can Call Me Sir by Grizziesmom
Rated: MA • 96 Reviews Summary: When Sam is brutally raped by a virtual stranger, Jack helps her cope and discovers some things along the way.
Date: 2007.07.21 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 - Discovery Is Deadly
I love the story thus far! The scilence of MC is very dramatic and emulates the kind of emotions I believe you were aiming for!, I'll read on and let you know!
Date: 2007.08.27 Title: Chapter 24: Chapter 24 - Tell Me It Ain't So
Again, very well done! Jacks emotions are very powerful and you have demonstrated that very well, once the tiger is out of his cage, it is hard to ask him back in. I'll read on.
Date: 2007.07.21 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4 - You Can't Go Home
Well done with development and exicution of the characters! However, my only advise is that the flash backs are sometimes confusing....but the story remains great! -reading on
Date: 2007.07.21 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5 - Settling In
The dreams were a very nice touch!-Reading on
Date: 2007.07.21 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6 - The Set Up
Well done! It lookslike the plot is coming along very nicely! -Reading on
Date: 2007.07.21 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7 - A Day in the Sun
The vacation was a great idea, however I am waiting for this 'program' twist - Reading on
Date: 2007.07.21 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 3 - Home and Hearth
A look into Sams mind! I have thus far loved the organization of this story as well as its content, Good job -I'll keep reading
Date: 2007.07.21 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 17 - And We're Outa Here
I love the setting, very circular which I love, Well Done -Reading on
Date: 2007.07.21 Title: Chapter 18: Chapter 18 - MIA
Please write more on this stroy line! Thus far I am very hooked, you have a tallent for writing that should be explored and enforced! Write more, fast! yet don't rush......
Author's Response:
Thanks for the input. Yes, there are several places that transitions suck...I've never been real good at that. But as you can see, I love Sam and Jack...okay, I just love everybody in the show, but Jack and Sam are my two favorites. As for the "canon splices" as I like to call them, they really are filler and and a way to show the passage of time, but i knew no better way than the typical, trite "it was six weeks later...." With the episode insertions, I feel there's a passage of time that is automatically implied.
Keep reading..I'll keep writing...I promise to not take too long! I do have a couple more chapters up and am working on the "transition" of the next few. The thing is nearly done and knowing someone is out there waiting helps to motivate one, doesn't it? lol
Date: 2007.08.23 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19 - At the Waterfall - Night
Sorry it has taken me so long to logon and to finish reading your wonderful story. This chapter is very well writen, the character interaction is true to each individual and also the plot line. It happens so many times that fan writers develop the plot, yet do not keep the integrity of the characters. You have done very well! I will read on!
Date: 2007.08.23 Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 20 - Not Right Now!
Also very well done! The control that Jack uses is very rare and only proves his genuine character, i'll read on!
Date: 2007.08.23 Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 21 - The Waterfall - Day
All I can say; very well done!
Date: 2007.08.23 Title: Chapter 22: Chapter 22 - Teal'c's Confession
I love the Sam/Teal'c interaction, however I am not quite convinced that Teal'c would end the conversation that way, yet we have also never seen Teal'c in that kind of situation before. You have painted a beautiful picture in my mind of the situation, yet have not convinced me of Teal'c character...I believe that he is the hardest to write about! So don't sweat it! Your writing is beautiful! I shall read on!
Date: 2007.08.23 Title: Chapter 23: Chapter 23 - Jack's Shower
Again, what can I say. very well done! I'll read on!
Date: 2007.08.27 Title: Chapter 25: Chapter 25 - Wake Up, Little Sammie
The interaction between Sam and Jack is perfect! I'll read on.
Date: 2007.08.27 Title: Chapter 26: Chapter 26 - The Wake Up Call
The ending caught my heart! OMG......I'm almost crying, that means you have done a great job....I'll read on!
Date: 2007.08.27 Title: Chapter 27: Chapter 27 - It's About Time!!!
Again, your interaction between characters is perfect and profound....I'll keep reading
Date: 2007.08.27 Title: Chapter 28: Chapter 28 - What's going on here?
Yes, we are building up to a very large onflict....I cannot wait! I'll read on
Date: 2007.08.27 Title: Chapter 29: Chapter 29 - Not Going Fishing...Again
You have established the routien very well, lets see how the plot carries itself out.
Date: 2007.08.27 Title: Chapter 30: Chapter 30 - Death, the Small Victory?
The Tiger's roar cannot be held, Jacks emotions are welling and it is very obvious. Good job! I'll read on.
Date: 2007.08.27 Title: Chapter 31: Chapter 31 - Making Plans...House Plans
I love the ending of this chapter! LOL, you have put a smile on my face with your plot line and character interaction! I'll read on.
Date: 2007.08.27 Title: Chapter 33: Chapter 33 - Waiting for a Delivery
Perfect! I'll read on!