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Name: PaulineFitz (Signed) · Datum: 2009.07.25 10:42 · Für: Part 2.
Glad I found this one. Excellent, really enjoyed it, Thank you

Author's Response: Glad to see that you enjoyed reading my story and thank you very much for your reveiw; I have a second story uploaded now, why not check it out you may enjoy that one also.  :-D


Name: jessica (Anonymous) · Datum: 2008.09.04 14:55 · Für: Part: 1.
Great story, I really enjoyed reading it.  I'm a sucker for happy endings!  You should definately continue writing.   :-)

Author's Response:

Hi, and thank you so much for the reveiw; it makes my day to know that you enjoyed my story, I have two other stories that I have written; i'm just trying to find a beta for them at the moment but as soon as I find one I'll get them posted.  ;-D



Name: fuszika (Anonymous) · Datum: 2008.06.18 23:53 · Für: Part 2.

Thanks for this story. I think this is all shipper's dream that happening in this fanfic. I just loved the events and the revolutions. The actions fit well to the series, they behave in the normal situations like the actual caracters of SG-1. We just hope we can ever see a kind of tiny detail from your story between Sam and Jack. :)

So, Congarulations!



Author's Response: Wow thanks for a great reveiw i'm so happy that you enjoyed reading it, it's made my day thank you.  ;-D


Name: Disneynut (Signed) · Datum: 2008.06.09 00:36 · Für: Part 2.
Well done.  I love that Janet was in the story.  I definately think you need to do a sequel.

Author's Response:

Hi and thanks for your comment, i'm so glad that you enjoyed it,  i would love to do a sequel to it, i'm just not sure when i could do it. I've got

one story that needs a beta,  one that i'm in the middle of writing, and loads of ideas. Lol so i'm gonna have to at least finish the two i'm on then

hopefully i can do it then. And i plan on having Janet in it alot, again thanks for your comment it's made my day he he,  ;-D 



Author's Response:

Hi and thanks for your comment, i'm so glad that you enjoyed it,  i would love to do a sequel to it, i'm just not sure when i could do it. I've got

one story that needs a beta,  one that i'm in the middle of writing, and loads of ideas. Lol so i'm gonna have to at least finish the two i'm on then

hopefully i can do it then. And i plan on having Janet in it alot, again thanks for your comment it's made my day he he,  ;-D 



Name: Oberon (Anonymous) · Datum: 2008.06.04 05:59 · Für: Part: 1.

I'm sorry. It wasn't my intention to offend British people in general. I just thought, since English is your native language, you should know, how to use it.

I really enjoyed your story and hope to see a sequel including Jacob, lots of babies and - of course - a gigantic wedding. Soon.



Author's Response:

Lol don't worry i wasn't offended. And iv'e not done anything like this scince school, i just need to get back in the swing of it.  I've just got the latest version of word so that will help to As for a sequel i hope to do one soon iv'e got one story waiting for beta and another in the making so i'll hopefully do it then.

Thanks for your comment i'm glad that you enjoyed it.



Name: Aussie (Anonymous) · Datum: 2008.06.04 04:31 · Für: Part: 1.

I enjoyed this story, although found it hard going at times due to spelling errors.  Word 2007 picks up on contextual spelling hours, e.g. too instead of to or grown instead of groan, but the older ones don't.

As a fellow fanfic writer (although not for a while), I can sympathise.  It's very hard to see your own mistakes ... you just start seeing what you expect to see.

If you would like for me to act as a beta, I would be happy to do so.  I have an account with Helio under the name Aussie and you can email me from there if you'd like me to beta.

I hope I haven't discouraged you with this review.  Hey, professional writers have editors ... why shouldn't we fanfic writers too?



Author's Response:

Hi no don't worry you haven't discouraged me, i would love for you to beta this and my others, that would be great.

I think i do need to update word i just got the latest version so my next one will be better. Im glad that you enjoyed the story. ;-D



Name: Oberon (Anonymous) · Datum: 2008.06.03 12:44 · Für: Part: 1.

Hello Emma,

first of all, I have to say, I've never seen a fanfic like this before.

The store is all nice and cute and all that. But since you're from the UK, I can't believe how many spelling mistakes you made and how much rules of grammar you chose to ignore. And I found them, although English ist not my native language, so I don't, how many I probably missed.

Congratulations to your beta-readers, by the way, they did just great.

Further, Jack's cabin is in Northern Minnesota, the SGC is in Colorado Springs. A distance of several thousand miles, so you don't drive there for just a coffee in the afternoon sun and then go back home.

But again, the story was nice.



Author's Response:

Hi thanks for your comment, i did use a program to check the spelling and the grammer. What does me being from the uk have to do with

anything? As for Jack's cabin i know where it is, i have two copies of this story one on my laptop and one on my comp, i changed cabin to house on one of the copies and intended to upload that one i must of added the wrong one. I'm glad you liked the story as a whole.



Name: Renee Martinez (Anonymous) · Datum: 2008.06.01 20:41 · Für: Part 2.
you should do one when it has to do with the babies and stuff like that.....i hope you get the point.

Author's Response:

Thanx for your comment i would love to do a sequel to this got a few ideas for it, iv'e got a few stories on the go at the mo so i don't know when i'll get around to writting it but hopefully it wiill be soon. Thanks again knowing you liked it made my day. ;-D



Name: Jessica (Anonymous) · Datum: 2008.05.31 22:31 · Für: Part: 1.
I love it you should deffinately do a sequel.

Author's Response:

He he thanx you've made my day. I have got a few ideas for a sequel but i'm nowhere near ready to write it as i'm looking for a beta for my second

story and i have a third in the making. Hopefully with a few more encouraging reveiws like yours and the last comment a sequel will be written.

Many thanks agian for your comment.



Name: scarletwitch0 (Signed) · Datum: 2008.05.31 17:50 · Für: Part 2.
Wonderful story, but hard to read because of the spacing. I would like to see a sequel, just to find out Jacob's reaction. Hope he scares Jack a bit.

Author's Response:

Thanks for your comment it is most appreciated. What was it about the spacing you think i should change to make it easier to read.

Any and all ideas are gratfully received, many thanx. I'd love to do a sequel.



Name: Pattie (Anonymous) · Datum: 2008.05.31 15:45 · Für: Part: 1.

Hi there,

The characterisation in this story are really good and I really enjoyed the story but it would be much better if you paid attention to the grammar. You constantly use "were" instead of "we're" which is an abrevation of "we are" and you get your "to" and "too" muddled up. "Too" is used when you talk about "too much" but "to" as in belonging to someone and you need additional punctuation. Tidy this up and it will be a great story.  Get yourself a beta reader and it will help the problem. Hopefully this is helpful, just meant as a small criticism.

PS "succumb" not surcome, try www.dictionary.com for a useful site. 



Author's Response:

Hi thanks very much for your comment it's been very helpfull, i did use a grammar checker, but we must of missed some,  thanks for

the correct spelling of succumb it was driving me mad and the spell checker was no help. I'm glad you enjoyed that story. I'll be telling my

husband that he needs to pay closer attention when he beta's my stories thanks again. 



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