Okay first you need to use spell check, second you need a beta reader it will help with continuity other than that great story, loved that they coudn't stand being apart and the huge fruit was brilliant, something so simple as trading for fruit and niceities instead of guns and weapons it was nice to hear. I think you should write more the more you write the better you get at it more confident...get a beta get spell check and get writing....
Linda
Author's Response: Thanks for your review... i have got a beta reader
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Good story idea. But poor grammer.
Author's Response: Thanks, if you read my profile you would notice that my weakness is spelling and grammer
Great story line, but you wanted feedback, so here it is. I don't know who did your editing, but your grammar is way off.
It may not effect other people as it does me, but i find it hard to read fluently when there is mis-spellings and bad grammar.
Sorry again, but I gave my honest opinion.
Author's Response: Thanks for your feed back
hope there is going to be more on soul mates
Author's Response: there is more to come soon as i have heard from my beta reader
please i need moreee jajaj, congratulationsss, i am from argentina sorry for my english, i like very much your history, so i need to know the continuation of this jaja. Good wishes for you and healthy .
Author's Response: jaja??? there more coming soon, thanks for your review